Revised Post: Digging in Another Man's Graveyard

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lest we get struck with a hyrdoblast so hard it will knock us cleanly across the instance – if not killing us entirely

Change “will” to “would”

Getting in the water was easy, but for whatever reason – jumping back on to the boards was an exercise in frustration

I don’t make a huge pause here between reason and jumping, and it isn’t particularly dramatic, YMMV, possibly a comma?

we listened in while he worked end the suffering

“…while he worked to end the suffering…” I would kill several hobos/babies/kittens to have that whole marathon leveling rant to listen to over and over.

I knew what what he was going to say.

“I knew that’s what he was going to say.”

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