Why Raid Teams Fail
Raid teams, like any group of individuals working together in a part of a business organization or sports team, are prone to succumb to dysfunction.
Fairly clunky. How about: “Raid teams, like any group of individuals working together as part of a business organization or sports team, can be prone to dysfunction.” You could use succumb there if you like but both sounds redundant.
Offer / accept
No spaces. The spacing is off on a few other “/” bits, check em out.
A raid that avoids conflict usually looks this
“looks like”
Lack of Trust)
Remove close parenthesis.
save the chit-chat to trash clears
Change “to” to “for”.
Causes raid members second-guess one another
“Causes raid members to second-guess…”
Adapt and / or change strategy as needed, without hesitation or guilt–As much as we can avoid, we typically do not change strategies on a boss mid-raid, but sometimes it is necessary
Should be a full stop after guilt and not an em dash.
play with blinders
I like it as the whole statement “play with blinders on”, YMMV.
raid guilds–don’t
Up till now you’ve been going with the NYT/AP style with spaces, but this is the Chicago style with no spaces (also all the em dashes should really be — not --, lazy).
Cause the very best raiders in the guild…to begin looking elsewhere for a guild
Don’t think this needs an ellipses, not really building suspense and the pause interrupts the sentence unnecessarily.
Start repairing your raid team by building the foundation of trust, encourage conflict, drive commitment, enforce players to be accountable, and ultimately, drive the quality of what they do onward and upward.
Tense is off. You start out with -ing and then switch: “Start repairing your raid team by building the foundation of trust, encouraging conflict, driving commitment, enforcing players to be accountable and ultimately driving the quality of what they do onward and upward.”