Revised Post: The False Step

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guild mates

In this instance, this should be one word.

A-Team / B-Team

Spacing.

Eventually, they were acting a single cooperative unit.

Change “a” to “as”.

pull as many must-have roles that were necessary for the kill, and rotate in folks that did not get a chance to be present for the first clear.

“we brought as many must-have roles that were necessary for the kill, and rotated in folks that did not get a chance to be present for the first clear.” Works with the tense and clarifies a bit what was going on (pulls sounds like not pulling from the pool but out from the raid).

They knew goals we had set out to accomplish

“They knew the goals…”

corner–with

deceit–not

Spacing.

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Rolled all the edits up, plus performed another pass and touched up some additional sentences here and there.