I was now starting to feel the shriveled people economy first hand
Shrivelled vs shriveled, I’ve always seen it with one “l” but w/e. The important part is, what is “shriveled people economy” is that a thing?
Any inquiry for help would only paint gigantic targets around us.
I’d go with “on us” rather than “around”.
International player were welcome
“player” needs an “s”
An robotic internet dragon
Change “an” to “a”
did not end with Dewy
Typo or shortening and already short name for a nickname?
she kicked the doors open into DoD
“she kicked open the doors to DoD”
to gross each other other out.
Remove one instance of “other”
The things I heard discussed that day no human should have to endure.
Dalans may have “seen things”, but reader, I say to you on this day:
I’ve heard things.
Now I’m sad I missed this =(
immediately logging back
add “in” after “back” here
a disconnection, which were infrequent.
Even though you are speaking about potentially multiple instances, I think you have to match the case here so it should be “which was infrequent.”